Well-rounded, interesting, have some flaws and in general several steps outside of usual OC general "ughness" that is prevalent in fan fiction. There has to be a good reason why House would fall in love with her, or want to be her daddy, or want to adopt her, and so on. Self-inserts are generally not welcome unless it's a self-insert that isn't obvious. In other words, no having House or Wilson mooning over college-age girls. I can guarantee that concept won't make it here. :-)

The story must be well-written, with great dialogue, motivation, good grammar and spelling (spellchecker IS your friend!). If you know nothing about medicine then either research or keep the medical references and situations to a minimum.

These guidelines will change as I have more caffeine and time to think on them but that covers the basics for now.

Questions? :-)

1: Ray isn't Mary Sueish, or at least I tried very hard to prevent that

2: House isn't OOC(but Cameron probably is), and he doesn't accept Ray right away

3: I have to go away, but read it and see!

Cameron is too OOC - she wouldn't confide in a teenaged girl like that.

I'm assuming Ray would have more backstory.

She's a bit Mary Sue-ish; the fact that Cameron confides in her reveals it.

You desperately need an editor. We call them beta-readers. Someone who is a stickler for strong English, grammar, spelling, and knows the show inside and out. They'll point out your mistakes and make suggestions. They're INVALUABLE.

The reason I am suggesting all of this is because I think you have a strong storyline buried in there and with development would make a great read. You may even have to take the story down while editing - and that's fine, too. Or even reupload the documents and replace the first chapters as you go.

Get it edited, cleaned up and get back with me, cause I think you've got something there. :-)

1) I tried extremely hard not to make it fluffy and unrealistic

2) I work on my spelling on grammar- though the first few chapters i kept changing tense

3) Kimee has some real depth (I think) and she's kind of damaged, though you don't get that at first, and you have to really look for my subtle hints, though one day her story will be told

4) I can't think of another reason...

What does OOC mean? I don't really get that little abbreviation

OOC means "Out of Character." It's a pet peeve of mine.

A "Mary Sue" is an Other Female Character that is basically too perfect, too damaged, too perky, knows the answer to everything, graduated the head of her class, has all the solutions, is loved by everyone. Sometimes called a "self-insert" in that the author has inserted herself into the storyline. A lot of younger House fans do this by writing themselves as Cameron's younger sister or cousin, House's long-lost daughter, that sort of thing. Another pet peeve of mine, although I've read a couple that were decent.

I didn't think she came across that way at all, in fact. She's not House's romantic interest (guilty as charged on my end *g*), she's not perfect or anything like that. I think you could work on your sentence structure and such, but I added it anyway. Might want to grab yourself a beta-reader to go over it and offer you some suggestions. :-)

Thanks for the list. I'm looking forward to checking out some of the stories on it.

Thanks for the list. I'm looking forward to checking out some of the stories on it.

There are four which might interest you and this community/forum: Adagio For Strings, Suddenly I See, Miserere Nobis (not for the faint of heart), and Wilson's Lament.

If there's anything you or anyone else can see that can be improved upon, please let me know!

www.fanfiction.net/~s0ulm8

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There are four which might interest you and this community/forum: Adagio For Strings, Suddenly I See, Miserere Nobis (not for the faint of heart), and Wilson's Lament.

If there's anything you or anyone else can see that can be improved upon, please let me know!

www.fanfiction.net/~s0ulm8

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