Hi, I finished a new chapter in my fic a few days ago and I need some to give it the once over to tell me if it has any mistakes or if the story's bad or anything

I can, if you want.

Thanks!

This is the fic in question: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4710758/2/Of_Raptors_and_Other_Things

I have already posted the chapter, it's chapter two btw, but if you could look over it I could edit any errors.

Alright, I can do that.

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