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Ever Heard of a Dictionary

1. This thread is for links only. Non-link posts will be deleted.

2. Go here:

http://forum.fanfiction.net/topic/61196/48561915/1/

If you want to talk/bitch.

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Seen a shit!fic? Read a poorly written story that made you want to use bleach to clean your brain and eyes? Then post the link here and we shall look on to the story. Remember, the link must be complete and clickable for us to see. It should be theLINK for the chapterand not the author's name. Add a short description telling us why it should be reviewed/reported, and let us know whether it's for reviewing or reporting. In case you're uploading a report list, clearly categorise the stories by infraction but do not post links to chapters more than a year old.

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Cleaned up last: December 12th, 2011.

Jul 19th 2009, 2:33pm . Edited by Don Saurus, Apr 02nd, 8:12pm #1
Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar

Review/report list 07/04/2011

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6749410/1/Nazi_Zombies_The_Story_behind_the_Music (Script)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6405470/1/It_all_started_in_detention (Songfic chapter)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6782003/14/The_Legend_of_Cynder_A_New_Beginning (Script)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6397542/1/You_Have_No_Idea_Just_How_Much_You_Mean_To_Me (Chapter character list/chapter with no content)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6804181/1/days_at_der_rise (Possibly a troll chapter?)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6833864/1/ACTIVISIONS_NEW_GAME_FOR_SPYRO (Non story)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6817882/1/One_Hell_of_a_Birthday (Lemon)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6145729/1/Instructions_not_Included (HYOOOOOOGE lemon fic)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6734867/1/Things_I_Am_Not_Allowed_to_Do_in_REPO (List fic)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6805649/1/Am_I_A_Monster (Script)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6870068/1/Sonamy_babys (Script)

Jul 04th 2011, 3:23pm . Edited by Tallz Is De Langste Ster, Jan 01st, 12:58pm #2
Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar

This author is more lulzy than anyone I've ever encountered. Here's his infringements/poorly written stories:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5372519/1/Timon_Pumbaa_Pumbaa_Pumbaa_Pumbaa (Not sure what -FLASH- is supposed to be, but it probably shouldn't be there. Grammar tips?)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4895829/1/Kingdom_Hearts_Truth_or_Dare (Truth or dare. Later chapters say he's changing format from script and making it non-interactive, but the chapters of script and interactivity still remain).

Jul 13th 2011, 8:30pm . Edited by Bitter Sea Light, Sep 28th 2011, 4:01am #3
Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7180877/1/its_me_or_her

Sweet Jesus. The author doesn't even spell 'monkey' correctly in the chapter title. If I didn't know this person was a serious 'author' due to prior experiences, I would call it a trollfic...

Jul 18th 2011, 11:20pm #4
U.N. Owen was Her

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7081543/1/Pokemon_World_Masters_League (Authors' notes on chapter 1 and 6)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6313067/1/Pokemon_Chains_of_the_Legendaries (SYOC)

Jul 25th 2011, 2:17am . Edited Jul 25th 2011, 2:21am #5
Ten ways to spoil dinner

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7205065/1/Hte_Lergend_of_Zelda_Ganon_Revnege

Trollfic. Reported~

Jul 27th 2011, 3:02pm . Edited by Bitter Sea Light, Sep 28th 2011, 3:34am #6
Lady Elizabeth of New York

A very poorly done script fic.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7103946/1/Friends_Season_11

Jul 31st 2011, 10:51am #7
U.N. Owen was Her

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7114982/14/OneShot_Requests (Interactive)

Aug 03rd 2011, 7:13pm #8
Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6846538/1/Star_Fox_OC_Academy (SYOC/non-story content in first chapter)

Aug 07th 2011, 7:28am #9
Lady Elizabeth of New York

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7296843/1/My_Lullaby

Just song lyrics with two or three lines of original work.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5706604/1/

A badly written porn fic

Aug 17th 2011, 5:09pm . Edited by Bitter Sea Light, Sep 28th 2011, 3:58am #10
Lady Elizabeth of New York

The imposter: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/3135069/Danny_B_4lyfe

The imposer's story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7278319/1/Avatar_The_Last_Airbender_oneshot_UrsaHakoda

The real Author: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/147048/Qwi_Xux

The real story: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6383663/1/Rocking_the_Boat

Aug 27th 2011, 5:38pm #11
Spektr

The 25th Annual Hunger Games by Laralulu

Not only does she write poorly, and has numerous author's notes, she's also a massive fucking review whore. She actually created a pledge to get her reviewers to review every chapter or their character would die.

Kill it. Kill it dead.

Aug 28th 2011, 9:58pm #12
consultingdick221B

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3603910/1/The_2nd_Story_to_Rebecca_smith

Other reviews picked up on the horrendous English skills and canon rape and said to have reported this, but it's still there.

Artemis is a maiden goddess. She doesn't have sex or children. I thought this was obvious, but apparently not.

Kill it. Kill it dead.

Sep 04th 2011, 2:48pm #13
consultingdick221B

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3573385/1/OMG_WHY#

The title says it all. Why?!

They use Quizilla as an excuse for their story's 'weirdness'. Bitch please, I came from Quizilla and can capitalise the correct words.

Sep 04th 2011, 3:11pm #14
N. Harmonik

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7365576/1/The_Echidna_King

No difference between this fic and the film, except for name changes.

Flame-broil it.

Edit: It's back with only a slight difference.

Sep 07th 2011, 11:48pm . Edited Sep 08th 2011, 9:19pm #15
U.N. Owen was Her

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7365398/1/Create_a_werepokemon

- Non-story and interactive.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7317591/1/CELESTES_POKEMON_JOURNEY#

- Shitfic. Contains very bad grammar, and the main character is an obvious Mary Sue - a My Immortal wannabe story. Review and report at will, people~

Sep 08th 2011, 5:39pm . Edited by Bitter Sea Light, Sep 28th 2011, 3:56am #16
N. Harmonik

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6972447/1/Evil_With_In_A_Rose

Makes a few spelling and grammatical errors, Sally is out-of-character and randomly inserts small author's notes within the story itself. I reviewed and got told that 'it's a story', 'don't like it, don't review or comment on it' and that a friend told her to put the authors' notes in.

Bring it to a slow boil if you please.

Sep 12th 2011, 3:37pm . Edited Sep 12th 2011, 3:38pm #17
sookcide

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7386721/1/Doing_the_Unthinkable

Yes, this 'writer' is back, posting her trash again.

Has admitted in the authors notes that it was collaboration story with some other writer and basically decided to take this story for themselves and use it.

Feel free to burn slowly, over a long period of time.

*Note* I could not click on the chain icon when trying to link this in the thread, please don't delete but take a look and help out if you will.

Thanks

Sep 17th 2011, 2:31am . Edited by Bitter Sea Light, Sep 28th 2011, 3:45am #18
Alos the Vampire Prince

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/3221097/the_kolkolkolkol_master

ALL of his stories. I'm making a desperate cry to you amazing people. Please get him OFF FF.

J!edit: Link made clickable.

Sep 23rd 2011, 8:41pm . Edited by Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar, Nov 15th 2011, 1:54pm #19
U.N. Owen was Her

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7408854/1/Need_your_characters_4_a_rapetorture_lemon

Interactive and another story that glorifies rape or torture.

Oct 16th 2011, 7:10pm #20
N. Harmonik

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7129252/1/One_Less_Lonely_Gurl

The author's attitude and writing has improved visibly since the first chapter yet the main character's still the biggest Mary-Sue I've ever clapped eyes on. And she randomly humanized the characters.

Bring it to a slow boil please.

Oct 17th 2011, 1:57pm . Edited Mar 05th, 3:58am #21
Spartan Evil Altego

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2451584/ghostmctavish

This kid visted the troll forum recently. He is filled to the brim with stereotypes, cliches, horrid spelling and use of real world characters.

Destroy him. Destroy his story list and salt the earth.

Oct 17th 2011, 5:27pm #22
Oberoniss

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7477421/1/LOOKAT_GEAT_FGHRT

A simply incomprehensible Transformers story. If this was not written while high, drunk, or having sex, I will be greatly suprised. Kill it with napalm.

Oct 19th 2011, 12:45pm #23
Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7457950/3/DEXTO

Chapters 2 and 3 are in a play format. I was unsure about that until I saw the bits of script. Either way, it's not prose.

Chapter 1 is somewhat of an "informative authors note" kind of thing. I wouldn't call it story content, but it's apparently relevant to the plot. I didn't report for that because I wanted to make sure I was in the right first...

Oct 20th 2011, 8:11pm #24
katara-says

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7077941/7/I_dont_regret_falling_in_love

Original fic. Author has bad attitude. Thinks a basic reminder of the guidelines constitutes as 'flaming' and wants only 'sweet' reviews.

I've posted on the Order of the Concritters forum regrading this author and her stories, just thought I'd post here too since flaming seems a bit more acceptable here. I was against flaming at first but I've changed my mind seeing this author's attitude when I merely reminded her of the guidelines about real people and original stories, and nothing more. But today, I flamed the particular story. Here was the author's note preceding the chapter that led me to do so:

- Yo, Its good to be back, isnt it? I dedicate this one to my sweet reviewers, specially Unsa and Ridz (I knew it was you hehe!) Alright, there's something more I gotta say. Well some people out there have been reporting my fanfictions. And the reason they tell me are the obligations on using living characters and all that BS. well firstly THIS story is completely my idea and the characters are mine! SO STOP WITH THE FLAMES! secondly, There are hundreds of Justin Bieber fanfics on here and None of them, I repeat, NONE OF THEM got sued yet! so you better stop telling me mine will get this site sued alright? Okay so I was really pissed off by these random flames. Lets get back to the story shall we? -

Please, flame her stories to a crisp and report, given her attitude.

Oct 27th 2011, 4:49pm . Edited Oct 27th 2011, 4:53pm #25
Bulldango

Pile Of Lemons Title pretty much explains it.

Kinda want to kill myself now.

Oct 29th 2011, 2:27pm #26
TT 2.1

There's a LOT of horrible Invader Zim ToD fics, but here's four specifically horrible ones:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381829/1/Invader_zim_Truth_or_DARE

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7466976/1/INVADER_ZIM_TRUTH_OR_DARE

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7389037/1/the_iz_and_dbz_dareshow_of_awesomeness

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6820694/1/NNY_CHAT2

Oct 29th 2011, 3:20pm #27
Storm in the Sunny Sky

I would almost never wish to have someone kicked off the site, but this author is esentially polluting the site with his/her super short stories. He/she has thirty stories but pretty much doesn't excede fifty words per story.

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2965906

J!edit: Link switched from FFN mobile version to regular FFN. Link made clickable.

Nov 03rd 2011, 8:17pm . Edited by Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar, Nov 15th 2011, 1:50pm #28
Lady Elizabeth of New York

I have told this author that lyrics were not allowed but he and his reviewers insist that because everyone is doing it it is okay.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7555801/1/A_Heart

Nov 16th 2011, 10:41am #29
Shanrock

This is a critique request, rather than a flame/deletion invite. I'm keen for some honest critiquing on one of my side-projects here on this site, and you guys would probably be more deliberate and thorough in your opinions than most others on the site.

Deus Ex Machina

Thanks in advance for any feedback any of you decide to give.

Nov 25th 2011, 2:09am #30
Elodie the Scribe

Second Chances

Absolutely awful Scarecrow/OC from Batman Begins. The OC is a Mary Sue who's name is Illandra and she thinks Jonathan Crane is soooo sexy that she gets distracted by his blue eyes when he's being very threatening to her. The author has no grasp of Scarecrow's character, and completely messed up his backstory. She insulted me by calling me *gasp* single! Oh, how it hurts!

Lol. I'll be putting up that PM in a jiff. Meanwhile, enjoy this...thing.

Nov 28th 2011, 9:47am #31
The Stupendous Jimbo

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7589821/1/Sorry_fans I wish my ego was this big...

Nov 29th 2011, 7:26pm . Edited Nov 29th 2011, 7:27pm #32
Elise the Jack

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7607299/1/Analysis#

A non-story that merely states opinions.

Also is rated K, but has the word "dickhead" towards the end.

Report, please. :3

Dec 05th 2011, 11:50am #33
Shai-Lang

I found two bad fics for two of my fandoms.

Here's one for the Fruits Basket series: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5278729/1/Living_in_a_World_of_Strangers

What we have there is yet another unoriginal speshul Mary-Sue of doom as she worms her way into the heart of Akito! (Who is actually a girl but it looks like the fanbrat hasn't read the manga) Wonder how she would react if she found out that fic is really a Yuri fic ;) But hey, I could go for some Yuri-ness the world could use more of it... Just not with a Mary-Sue torturing one of the canon characters.

Now we have one for Sailor Moon: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5362473/3/What_Happens_in_Vegas

Another crappy AU that uses Dub names, and doesn't even have Usagi as a Senshi! I ask you good people, What's the point of writing a fanfic where they're not Senshi when the whole point of Sailor Moon was them being Senshi!?

J!edit: Link made clickable.

Dec 11th 2011, 2:45pm . Edited by Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar, Dec 11th 2011, 5:29pm #34
Wolfblaze ut etiam Jimmystar

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4474025/3/Our_Life_in_a_Flashback

Authors note chapter.

Dec 20th 2011, 11:00am #35
Lady Elizabeth of New York

This brat blocked me after I said her grammar needed work. I swear that I didn't say anything mean and insulting and yet she called me a flamer. Please give this brat some criticism and let her see that I'm not the only one who thinks she needs help.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7682521/1/De_diversis_A_different_life

Dec 31st 2011, 6:45pm #36
Elodie the Scribe

Mistress Jay

Yet another Joker/OC fic where said OC is a Mary Sue. Let's see, she's Bruce Wayne/Batman's cousin, a supervillain, a lawyer powerful enough to get Joker into her custody, has purple eyes, has a horrible personality and no brains in her head.

Oh yeah, and her author spouts the "it's fanfiction so I can do whatever I want to" crap in a PM to me...and in their review to their own story. Yep, they actually reviewed the story itself, poking fun at how apparently Night Monkey and I don't have lives.

Have fun, dearies. :3

Jan 12th, 8:17am #37
N. Harmonik

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7748324/1/Sonic_bTRUTH_b_OR_bDARE_b

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7720788/1/bTruth_b_or_bDare_b

Interactive and script format.

Incinerate them!

Jan 26th, 12:43pm #38
Luigi Rocks

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7390037/1/gumder

This story is very badly written and it's in script format. The author is 10 years old; it even says so on his profile.

Here is a small sample of the story:

gumder

Nicole;good night anias

anias;good night mommy

(Nicole shuts the door)

Here's the link to the author's profile:

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2942764/phineasandgumball

Feel free to report all his stories. They'll make your eyes sore.

Feb 06th, 9:01am . Edited Feb 06th, 9:07am #39
Elodie the Scribe

Meet the sister of the Scarecrow and the Assassin

The author takes an interesting premise and ruins it. Basically, it's a The Dark Knight Saga/Red Eye crossover, with Jonathan Crane and Jackson Rippner as twin brothers. The story is told from the perspective of their younger sister. To me, that actually does sound like a decent idea because it wouldn't be too hard to mesh both Crane and Rippner's worlds together, and the sister's relationship with them both could be very compelling.

Alas, the sister is a Mary Sue, one of the very worst. In the first chapter alone she expresses hate for Jim Gordon over something that was out of his control, terrorizes and slut-shames a receptionist, abuses her older brothers, and generally acts like a despicable human being. The author has PM'd me and cleared up a few points about her, noting that the Sue will face negative consequences for mouthing off to Joker, so that's one thing at least. Although her excuse for the Sue's appalling behavior is "oh, she just had a bad day". Um.

Not to mention that Jackson and Jonathan act somewhat OOC, and the author's grammar is horrendous.

Feb 07th, 10:00am #40
Lady Elizabeth of New York

Script format and poorly written. She has gotten warnings on this story and her other stories.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6034938/1/

Here's the author in case you want to check out her other poorly written stories.

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2275115/Mondler21

Feb 09th, 4:14pm #41
Lady Elizabeth of New York

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7561840/1/Harry_and_Ginny

This person blocked me after I told them to work on their description.

Feb 15th, 4:47pm #42
Luigi Rocks

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7782237/1/CN_crossover

Another badly written story in script-format.

Feb 19th, 8:21pm #43
Raine Van Akado

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7782169/1/Im_Done_With_These_Silly_Video_Games

Another badly written story in script format. For the love of God, it burns! Same author as the story Luigi posted.

Feb 19th, 8:35pm #44
P.B.Writer

These stories are from the same author. I've tried to PM her with simple grammar tips and spelling suggestions (use spell check), but I've been ignored.

Guilty Beauty: A Naruto/Inuyasha crossover with little to no description, run-on sentence, and misspelled character names. She spells 'Midoriko' as 'Midoriki'.

Adpotion of a Neko: An Inuyasha/Prince of Tennis crossover. Grammar is disregardedEx:) 'She was about to knock on the nures...or doctors door when it opened up.'Even misspells Japanese words. Ex: "Aringato Nya!"

Feb 26th, 5:37pm . Edited Feb 26th, 5:38pm #45
The Sky Hedgehogian Maestro

Ultraviolence

Fandom: Sonic the Hedgehog

Blatantly misrated. Other problems are= Wrong genres intentionally stated; All bold.

Feb 27th, 2:29pm #46
Emelinee Baconinee Tortalinee

Here are a few fics that break the rules:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7879171/1/YuGiOh_Shippings (This is just a list of loads of YGO pairings; it's not a story at all.)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7870112/6/The_Dragons_Precious_Girl (Mary-Sue, and OOC Kaiba- the spelling isn't half bad but the story is just...)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7878592/2/There_are_two_of_them (I'm pretty sure the OCs are Mary-Sues.)

Edit:~ Hyperlinks inserted.

Feb 28th, 12:22pm . Edited by Tallz Is De Langste Ster, Mar 04th, 2:10am #47
N. Harmonik

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7767497/1/A_new_girls_life

I tried to constructively criticize this due to the lack of punctuation, the spelling and grammatical errors and the OOCness. This started a round of PMing and reviewing between me, her and her friend, Mystery Girl. They have both pretty much told me that if I don't like the mistakes, I shouldn't be flaming.

"Burn, I say. Burn!"

Edit: Oh, I neglected to mention; copyrighted song lyrics in the first chapter.

Mar 03rd, 10:18pm . Edited Mar 04th, 5:20am #48
Akela Victoire

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7895617/1/Rising_Evil

Let's see all the problems... Non-Story, the "author" can't spell/use correct grammar for shit and the OC mentioned is a Mary-Sue...

Mar 04th, 3:01pm #49
Arcane1ManaX

I'm Not A Princess

Has next to no relation to the section it's posted in, provides no background, description says,"I'm not a Princess... Never will... Never will be... Because I'm leaving this world... Good-bye... R&R I'M NOT DEAD!"

Not asking for flames, just some critique. The note seems like it could have been developed into a better story, instead of being a short suicide notice meant for one of the canon characters, who is normally one of the more cheery people in the canon.

Mar 08th, 10:19am #50
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